2017年11月浙江省高考英语读后续写试题分析及范例点评

2017年11月浙江省高考英语读后续写试题分析及范

例点评

2017年11月浙江省高考英语科目写作第二节依然是读后

续写，要求考生阅读一篇短文，根据所给情节续写，使短文与续

写部分合成一个完整的故事。自2016年10月实行新高考以来，

三次英语考试写作第二节均为读后续写，之所以如此，其中一个

原因可能是，相比于其他类型考题而言，读后续写对测试学生的

实际写作水平具有较高的有效性。这一点，从本次考试的试题与

答题情况也可看出。

答题情况也可看出。

一、题型分析

一、题型分析

与上两次考试一样，本次读后续写题依然是结合了对考生输

入（inputinput）与输出（）与输出（outputoutput）两种语言能力的考查（关于这两）两种语言能力的考查（关于这两

入（input）与输出（output

者能力的考查和读后续写文体特征等，请参见笔者发表于本刊

2017年第3期的《浙江省高考英语读后续写试题分析及范例点

评》一文）。但是，虽然同属记叙文，本次考试所给短文的故事

线索与逻辑复杂程度明显高于上两次，主要表现为次要信息较

多，对考生把握情节主线有较强的干扰（具体见本文“试题要点

分析”和“答题建议”）。从这一点来看，本次考试对考生的输

入考查要求远高于上两次。另外，从所给段落开头语来看，第二

段的开放性很强，考生可以有多种情节接续的可能，甚至可以有

体裁的转换。结合这两点，可以说，本次读后续写交际任务是否

能很好地完成，基本上取决于对所给短文阅读理解任务完成的情

况。这给我们的启示是，读后续写教学要见成效，阅读教学上所

花的功夫绝对不能少。

花的功夫绝对不能少。

二、题目要求

二、题目要求

阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整

的故事。

的故事。

A Vacation with My Mother

I had an interesting childhood. It was filled with

surpris and amuments， all becau of my

mother―loving， sweet， and yet abnt-minded and sweet

mother―loving，

forgetful. One strange family trip we took when I was eleven

tells a lot about her.

My two ts of grandparents lived in Colorado and North

Dakota，my parents decided to spend a few weeks driving ， and

Dakota

to tho states and eing all the sights along the way.

As the first day of our trip approached， David， my

eight-year-old brother， and I unwillingly said good-bye

to all of our friends. Who knew if we’d ever e them

again？， the moment of our departure arrived， and ？ Finally，

againarrived

we loaded suitcas， books， games， camping equipment，

and a tent into the car and bravely drove off. We bravely

drove off again two hours later after we’d returned home

to get the pur and traveler’s checks Mom had forgotten.

David and I were always a little nervous when using gas

station bathrooms if Mom was driving while Dad slept：： “You

slept

stand outside the door and play lookout （放哨） while I while I

（放哨）

go，， and I’ll stand outside the door and play lookout while

go

you go.” I had terrible pictures in my mind： “Honey，

where are the kids？” ？” “What？！ Oh， Gosh… I thought they

kids

were being awfully quiet.” We were never actually left

behind in a strange city， but we weren’t about to take

any chances.

On the fourth or fifth night， we had trouble finding

a hotel with a vacancy. After driving in vain for some time，，

time

Mom suddenly got a great idea：： Why didn’t we find a hou

idea

with a likely-looking backyard and ask if we could t up

tent there？ David and I became nervous. To our great

relief，， Dad turned down the idea. Mom never could

relief

understand our objections （反???. If a strange family

（反

Γ

showed up on her front doorsteps， Mom would have been

delighted. She thinks everyone in the world is as nice as

she is. We finally found a vacancy in the next town.

注意：

注意：

1.所所?m写短文的词数应为150左右；

1.左右；

3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；

3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；

三、试题要点分析

三、试题要点分析

四、答题建议

四、答题建议

五、习作点评

五、习作点评

[学生习作1]

The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had

brought with us. Thinking of this tent，suggested that ， Mom

tent

we go camping in the next village in excitement，eyes ， with

excitement

glittering. Considering her enthusiasm， we all agreed.

When the door of our car opened，stormed out instantly ， Mom

opened

and urged us to put up the tent. David and I were asked t

pick up some branches to build a fire. And when we came back， ，

back

Dad and Mom had already lain on the grass comfortably in

front of the tent，merrily with a local boy at our ， talking

tent

age，always cast a glimp at this tent curiously. Soon ， who

age

we learnt that the boy in rags even didn’t have a home to

live. Of cour，Mom “forgot” to take this tent with us ，

cour

again. We drove through veral states and saw lots

of great sights along the way. And we also had a nice time

living with my grandparents during that vacation. But what

impresd me most was that tent， which was forgotten

deliberately by Mom. Though she did love going camping，

she prented that poor boy with this tent out of sympathy.

It was Mom that made my childhood colorful. And it was also

she that showed me the true meaning of giving.

点评1

[学生习作2]

The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had

brought with us. The reason was that we couldn’t find a

hotel， meaning that our tent had to be ud and Mom’s dream ，

hoteling

came true. Unexpectedly， David noticed that Mon

disappeared after dinner. Eventually， it was Dad that

found Mom. This abnt-minded and forgetful woman

explained that she just wanted to ek some charming

flowers but got lost finally. However，to Mom，， thanks ， we

HoweverMom

found a new way with more beautiful views where she got

lost.

We drove through veral states and saw lots of great

sights along the way. All of a sudden， as driving， Mom

asked，“Where is our camping equipment？” In the end， ，

asked？” In the end，

we had to accept the fact that we ought to return to find

it left by Mom. In that time， I thought this trip was in

a mess becau of Mom. But it’s obvious for me today that

our trip should have been boring without this loving and

sweet lady. There is no person even a wi lady that can

match her， my loving， sweet， yet abnt-minded and

forgetful mom.

点评2

The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had

brought with us. It emed that we wouldn’t get any chance

to u it. Just when we felt tough to deal with it，bagger ， a

it

came into our sight. Mom soon came up with an idea that we

should give it to him. But the tent was really new and it

costed us a lot. Despite Dad， David and I’s objection，

Mom determined her mind and gave it to the bagger， which

means we couldn’t do camping anymore.

We drove through veral states and saw lots of great

sights along the way. The trip was wonderful and we really

had a nice time in my grandparents’ hou. Time flow so

swiftly that we couldn’t notice it. After we finished our t

couldn’

trip and came back to our sweet hou，suddenly found ， Mom

hou

something while checking the baggage. She whispered：

“Where was the tent？” That’s my Mom， a really nice

person but also a forgetful and abnt-minded woman.

?c评3

[学生习作4]

The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had

brought with us. Until then， it hadn’t shown any

advantages yet. David and I felt deeply upt about the

travel. It didn’t em like camping or travelling but

worrying about Mom all the time. The decisions she made and

the actions she did must be taken good care of. However，

Mom was lighted and was ready to continue the trip. She

didn’t say any words about the tent， even though Dad had even

tent，

mentioned it many times. Without any hesitation， we

continued the trip. She drove happily， while David and I

sat quietly behind.

We drove through veral states and saw lots of great

sights along the way. It had been veral times that my

brother screamed out “What a fantastic scenery！” The trip

became more interesting. I began to talk with Mom and Dad.

I felt warmth through Mom’s excited voice. We smiled and

laughed along the way. With the wonderful sights beside us， ，

us

we all enjoyed the trip. That day，realized that my mom ， I

day

was actually the nicest person in the world. It was her that

brought light to our lives. 点评4

[学生习作5]

The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had

brought with us. David like the tent very much. He like

sleeping in the tent. We can sleep in the tent. And we can

not found the place to sleep. But mom still said it is a

trouble. she always wanted to find a vacancy to sleep. But

I thinked. the tent is great. I could e stars and the moon

when I sleep in the tent. And I can look around the nation.

We drove through veral states and saw lots of great

sights along the way. I like the trip very much. I could

e a funny mom and a funny dad They always didn’t agree

another. And I also saw many beatiful views. I like this

views. Than we visited our grand Parents. They were healthy.

And they can play games with us. We lived at grand parents’

hou some days. Then we baced our home. I lived the

vacation with my mother.

?c评5

[学生习作6]

The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had

brought with us.

I and David were very shocked. I and David got to the

tent fast，only can cried and save help，that time， ， we ， At ，

fasthelptime

my mom go back，help we go out in the trouble. We ， she

back

drove through veral states and saw lots of great sights

along the way.

Though a few days， wee get the Colorado and North

Dakota，， we was very exsicing.

Dakota

At night， I and David had a dinner with my two ts

of grandparents and go back with mom. I mind that，， nobody

that

as nice as my mom

点评6

六、结语

六、结语