My favorite sport
There are much kinds of sports 。So as swimming, running and dancing. However, the sport what I like most is basketball. When I was in Great five，I started to play basketball in school. At that time, I found I had loved this sport deep.Now, I would like to watch basketball games as much as possible . The basketball games have given me the most wonderful time in my life.
My favorite basketballplayer is Yao Ming. becau Ilike to watch basketball games. Yao is one of the best basketball player in China. so he can keeps his legs in NBA, becau of his wonderful acting, more and more foreigners start to notice him now. As we know Yao is very tall,,SowecaneYao’s splendid performance. Yao is a kind hearted man.
I like him. I like basketball.
分析：這是一篇叙述自己爱好和最喜爱的体育明星的作文。学生的语法点出现了几个小错误。
1. muchkindsof 是指不可数名词的许多种类，此处的sports是可数名词。故要用 many kinds of sports.
2. So as swimming 改为 Such as swimming, 作者是说例如,短语such as 才是例如的意思。
3. the sport what I like most is basketball中，先行词是the sport , 关系代词用that而不是What.
4. I found I had loved this sport deep中，deep是形容词，应改成副词，深深地deeply。这句话可译成，我发现，我已经深深地喜欢上了这个运动！
5. Yao is one of the best basketball player in China.这句话中，player 要用复数players. One of 短语中的名词使用复数形式。
6. so he can keeps his legs in NBA。这句话中can 后边要加上动词原形。故 he can keep his legs in NBA.
修改后的作文
My favorite sport
There are many kinds ofsports 。Such as swimming, running and dancing. However, the sport that I like most is basketball. When I was in Great Six， I started to playbasketball in school. At that time, I found I had loved this sportdeeply.Now I would like to watch basketball games as many as possible. The basketball games have given me the most wonderful time in my life.
