巧析《暮光之城》英文原版,论续写写作技巧
摘要:新高考读后续写题型对于高中英语教学与学生写作能力提出新的要求,全面考察学生英语学科核心素养,将读写有机结合,考察学生读写能力、思维能力及分析阐释情感、观点和价值观的能力。故,写作能力的提高离不开读。本文将记叙文写作技巧和英文原版读本《暮光之城》结合,运用引用、分析、对比等方法深入分析续写写作技巧。
关键词: 暮光之城 读后续写 写作技巧
《暮光之城》讲述人类与吸血鬼之间的感人爱情故事,吸血鬼和狼人等奇幻元素的添加及作者深厚的文字功底使图书及相关主题产品风靡全球。因此对于《暮光之城》英文原版内容的深入分析,不仅对记叙文等题材写作能力提高具有指导意义,同时也对新高考改革下英语学科读后续写提升具有意义。
成功的记叙文写作首先要有明确的主题、有效的情节、合理的逻辑和故事框架,故,在续写文章时,不仅要注重叙述角度,人物特点,语言风格于前文高度融合,而且要注重情节罗辑思维合理清晰,精妙安排情节,注重故事转折和高潮的设定。除此以外,环境描写、语言行
为描写、修辞手法的使用等写作提分技巧的使用使写作提高具体化。《暮光之城》作者在细节的处理中,多重记叙文写作技巧的使用,对于新高考改革下读后续写提分技巧具有启发意义。
一、巧借环境描写
环境描写氛围自然环境和社会环境描写。不仅对社会环境、时代背景和人物活动场所进行阐述,而且起着渲染气氛、衬托心情,塑造人物和推动情节发展的作用。在写景过程中,不能为了写景而写景。
例1.The sun began to ri in the sky,bathing the mountain in the golden light.
翻译:太阳开始从东方升起,伴随着动作是整个山都沐浴在霞光中。
例2.The sky was a curdled grey burdened with lumps of clouds.
翻译:天灰蒙蒙的,乌云密布。
xix【Abstract】My mother drove me to the airport with the windows rolled down.It was 75 d
egrees in Phoenix, the sky a perfect, cloudless blue. I was wearing my favorite skirt-- sleeveless white eyelet lace;I was wearing it as a farewell gesture.(Twilight,Meyer 1973,3)
作者运用环境描写,正面衬托女主人公搬离母亲家时的释然和洒脱,体现伊莎贝尔不同于同龄人的成熟和独立。
【Abstract】My eyes opened to a bright, white light. I was in an unfamiliar room, a white room.The wall beside me was covered in long vertical blinds;over my head, the glaring lights (Twilight,Meyer 1973,458)
女主人公受伤后,在医院清醒的片段,从环境描写入手,由远至近,不仅有效告知场景的转换,而且展现伊莎贝拉从起初对陌生环境的恐惧到逐渐确认的过程。使作者从第一角度体会昏迷刚醒时的感受。
二、巧用情绪、语言、行为描写
记叙文写作中,情绪、语言、行为描写是展示角色心理活动的有力媒介,优于苍白无力
的直接陈述。而情绪、心理、语言、动作等描写能力的提升,离不开阅读积累。
例1.She took a deep breath,leaned on her cane and limped to him.(动作链)
mua是什么意思翻译:她深吸一口气,依靠着她的拐杖,一瘸一拐地走向他。
例2.we all just stood there staring at him,motionless.(表情描写)
翻译:我们站在那里盯着他,一动不动。
例3.I stood rooted to the ground,my mind going blank.(心理描写)
翻译:我站在那里一动不动,惊呆了。treval
例4.He looked out of the window,biting his lips,as if thinking.(动作描写)
ficc翻译:他望向窗外,轻咬下唇,陷入沉思。
例5.Seeing the helicopter in the distance,Jane felt a mixture of excitement and grievance welling up in her heart and surging through her.(情绪描写)
翻译:当看到远处的直升机,混杂着激动和委屈的情绪在Jane的心中升腾,奔涌。
【Abstract】"And yet here you sit." There was a trace of disbelief in his voice;he raid one eyebrow.( Twilight,Meyer 1973,175)
作者用表情描写,表述男主人公爱德华质疑女主人公得知他是吸血鬼后依然选择接近他的勇气。
【Abstract】I looked down,frustrated.I unrolled my silverware,picked up my fork,and carefully speared a ravioli.I put it in my mouth slowly, still looking down, chewing while I thought.(Twilight,Meyer 1973,172)
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作者用动作链和面的描写及动作的拆解,表现女主人公内心活动,对于男主人公的提议的肯定回应。爱德华否决了伊莎贝尔的第一次敷衍的提问,要求其认真思考问的内容。
【Abstract】"Did you change your mind?"she asked."Isn't there anything I can get you?" I may have been imagining the double meaning in her words.
"No,thank you,but some more soda would be nice."He gestured with a lone white hand to the empty cups in front
The waitress was back with two more Cokes.She sat them down without a word this time, and left again.(Twilight,Meyer 1973,172)
作者用语言和动作描写,推进情节发展,一方面巧妙展示爱德华对服务员的示好的拒绝,一方面多角色转换,对于情节推进提供不同的角度,丰富画面。
【Abstract】My chin raid
His eyebrows
His gaze
My voice was glum by the time I finished.(Twilight,Meyer 1973,49)
以上例句体现作者在推进故事情节中,使用表情,语言,心理等多重描写,这些的灵活运用离不开广泛阅读、摘抄积累、模仿和超越。例如:
one's face lit up/brightened /glowed容光焕发
管理会计系统one's face flushed/burned with embarrassment尴尬的满脸通红
with one's eyes shining with excitement/joy眼睛发光
narrow one's eyes眯眼
one's eyes be sparkling like diamonds 眼睛发光
one's heart be in one's mouth 紧张到心提到嗓子眼
one's mouth hung open嘴张着
flash a bright smile露出灿烂的微笑考研数学三
squeeze out a bitter smile 挤出一个苦涩的笑脸
a smile of contentment 心满意足的微笑
tremble with anger气得发抖美国黑色星期五
三、注重修辞手法的使用
"Figurative 在线词典查询language is language that us words or expressions withmountainlion a meaning that is different from literal interpretation"。对比、夸张、拟人、比喻等修辞手法的使用可以将抽象的概念和读者意识中具体概念结合,提升表达效果。
例1:My old car is hard to drive.(Literal expression)
My old car drives like a tank.(Simile)
My old car is a tank.( Metaphor)
例2.The trees,like the longings of the earth, stand a tiptoe on peep at the heaven.(Personification)
翻译:群树如表示大地的愿望,踮着脚尖像天空窥望。
例3.The cherry blossoms look like a galaxy twinkling stars against the blue sky and the beautiful scenery is a feast for your eyes.(Simile)