杭州师范大学附属中学E-rater语言评分例析★
Ⅰ Grammar
memento1. Ill-formed verbs 动词时态错误
* We need the freedom to cho what we want to wear.
* The only thing to do is relax.
speak to me
2. Pronoun errors 代词错误
* Us students want to express ourlves.
奥运会会歌
* Taking a part-time job can help children make a lot of friend who may help him in the future.
我心目中的语文老师3. Posssive errors 所有格错误
* They stayed at my parents hou.
4. Wrong or missing words 错误用词、漏词
* They will not mistake again from the experience they had.
5. Sentence structure 句子结构错误
(1)fragments
* And the school too.
* For example, my high school classmates who did not like biology.
(2) run-on
* I have a friend his name is Liang.
* I argue that learning is a personal affair, others can just be guidance.
* Tho who choo newspaper cast doubt over the information get from television is not enough.
(3) subject-verb agreement
* A uniform reprent the school.
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ⅡUsage
1.Article errors 冠词误用
* I think that mostly people succeed becau of the hard work
* By doing the part-time job
* It is the one of the exercis he should do.
* bring the audience the more abundant information
2. Confud words 用词混淆
* Parents should give there children curfews.
的目光3. Incorrect word forms
•The choo is not an easy one.
•They will have more brave
•Students will complain about the ignorant.
sky watcher•tho loyalty customers
•environmental protect is a long-term plan.
4. Faulty comparisons 比较级错误family tree
* This is a more better solution.
5. Nonstandard verbs or word forms
* gonna, wanna, kinda, don’t, can’t, gotta, won’t,sorta, shoulda, woulda, coulda
Ⅲ Mechanics
1. Spelling
Undoubtly; irrevelant; Benifitial; technics; collegue
2. Capitalization: proper nouns; ntence-initial 大写字母
Names of countries; capital cities, male & female proper nouns, and religious holidays
3. Punctuation 标点符号
arent, cant, couldnt, didnt, doesnt, dont, hadnt, hasnt
4. Fud words
* It means alot to me
Fud:
alot, eachother, everytime, otherhand, highschool, phonecall, schoollife,
5. Compound words
* Hard working student;
play ground; some body; for ever;
katy perry好听的歌Ⅳ Style
1. Repetition of words
Large amounts of people want a job with more vacation time but low salary instead of a job with high salary but less vacation. However, I prefer a job with a high salary but less vacation to a job with more vacation time but a low salary becau I believe that
2. Inappropriate words or phras
* First, if a kid goes to work he or she can touch the adult society.
* Raising salaries of teachers will attract more talented people to get involved with education.
3. Too many ntences beginning with coordinate conjunction: and
And the time a student ud to do part-time job cannot be spend on studying, and a student may also feel tired after doing the job, and therefore lo the interest in studying.
An abnt-minded teacher lacks drive to make class intenly focud, and he often prepares nothing in advance, and he just wander among random topics, and this just wastes and kills times of industrial students.
4. Too many short ntences
5. Too many long ntences
Also, the fact that people are all required to follow the dress code in both school and in the work place illustrates the society's emphasis on learning and doing actual work, becau it is common n that diver and even strange styles of clothes may distract people from work or study, and uniform can greatly avoid that. [57 words]
