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此次，我特别邀请我的美国朋友（同样研究和教授雅思）“按照我的要求”写了一些文章，这里逐一贴出来，让大家分享一下，呵呵。。。
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v,RE_J0 The popular wisdom is that children of poorer families learn early on the value of a buck, and are thus naturally better suited to stretching moneywhen times get tough in adulthood. Inverly, the children of wealthy families, thoborn with a silver spoon in their mouths, are believed to be completely ignorant of the value of money, having had everything provided for them in their youth and oftentimes erroneously expecting the same situation in adulthood. They are believed to be prone to overspending and financial hyt
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A poor child may believe that one can get along, if not as easily, without wealth. A wealthy child may be well trained by a parent steeped in the knowledge of money management; the key to developing this skill is education.
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全文 的观点有待揣摩，作者很明显是不赞成题目的说法，即 Children who grow up in families which are short of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children who are brought up by wealthy parents. 但是作者自己是更偏向穷人家的孩子呢，还是富人家的孩子呢？！根据文章来看，作者是中立，他所看重的是他们所接受的教育。largescaleIn other words，整篇文章又是一次中立的写法。在雅思考试中，这种写法经常使用，还是非常实用的，大家可以学习一下。此外，文章中有很多好词好句，特别是长 句，值得模仿一下。负鼠英文
老人生活在养老院还是在家好 ？
8n_N8K_f_E_f!X0Aging is both a social and natural issue that has confronted human beings for centuries. In the Middle Age (medieval times A.D, 500 to about 1500), alchemists tried in vain to cre
ate a kind of catholicon (panacea / cure-all) to work against the process of aging. Today the aging problem looms more alarmingly. What has disappointed Man most is, unfortunately, that his scientific innovations and inventions have never cured much more than what they killed, despite so-called therapeutics and clinical medicine spinning faster and faster. Most pragmatically, however, man should first address the issue of where the old people should spend their lives.
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