读后续写:温二模续写讲评课
本节课特色:
1. 场景切分,所给文本可根据主要情节分成4个scenes:
1)Dana赠与Tim鼠娃娃; 2)Dana邀请Tim参加她的生日会;
3)Tim和妈妈为Dana挑礼物;4) Dana告知Tim她父母礼物不是真的老鼠。
不同于常规的6要素把握一个整体,场景的切分可以由点到面,扩充故事,树立立体故事画面感。根据story mountain的模式,将几个scenes串联在故事中,起承转合,推动情节。
2 矛盾冲突的场景分析:Dana父母的礼物由老鼠变换成自行车,导致Tim之前买的塑料球似乎派不上用场了;再结合线索词句,对所给提示句进行Q-A模式,回答提问,头脑风暴,从而使学生能清晰明白故事走向
3 课堂输入式的翻译:根据固定的故事走向,进行中译英句子翻译;
4.发散性的多样语言表达:一句多译,发挥句型与词句的多样性,让学生显性输出。
达成目标:
1.利用场景,构建story mountain,会分析故事情节,把握人物性格,不偏题;
2. 围绕主题写,侧重Tim问题解决和处理能力,体现友谊。
2.句子的翻译和多样表达,让学生的语料库能够灵活运用起来
3.通过其他同学的考场作文,学习优秀表达;也可以进行评析,取其精华去其糟粕,共同进步。
教学步骤
Step 1. Read for main plots
Q1. Main characters and their relationship
快速浏览文章,找到主要人物,明确主题
Q2. What happened to them? (main plots) 遵循记叙文6要素
根据故事线,进行故事梳理,建议分成4个场景 ; 再根据story mountain的模式,把握故事走向。
Step 2. Predict possible plot development
Clue 1 线索词 gifts
Clue 2 线索句To explore the ntences describing Dana, the rat toy and Tim, what could you learn from them ?
Clue 3 线索情节: Infer and brainstorm by raising questions
把握人物情感,根据线索,进行提问和回答(Q-A模式),理清续写方向。
Step 3. Draft a continuation (用上至少5个underlined Words)
Task 1 语言基础 Task 2:多种表达 Task 3:起草续写
Step 4. Check and copy your version
Step 5 讲评学生考场作文或者修改后的作品 (可以放在下个课时处理)
A Rat for Dana
温二模续写讲评
Step 1.Read for main plots
Q1. Main characters and their relationship?
Dana:a rat kind of person
Tim: Dana's good friend, classmate
Q2. What happened to them?(main plots)
At Dana's yard sale, Tim cho a baball from the toys spread on the card table and asked about the price.
Dana told him everything was a quarter except Nezumi, a cotton toy rat. It was gray with
some cotton sticking out from the hole where an ear had been torn off.
"Nezumi is extra special, so he's ten dollars. He needs a safe new home."Dana sighed.
Tim laughed saying he didn't have ten dollars. Dana laughed, too and gave Nezumi to Tim as a free gift becau he was her friend. When ITim whispered it was sort of old, Dana said old toys were the best.
Scene 1: At Dana's yard sale
Dana gave Nezumi,a cotton toy rat with an ear torn off, to Tim as a free gift.
She then invited Tim to her birthday party the next evening, adding that her parents were giving her a real rat for her birthday. Tim was amazed and asked if it was a live rat."Of cour,"Dana said.
Scene 2: Dana invited Tim to her birthday and said she would get a real rat from her parents.
At home,Tim's mother showed him the gift she had bought for Dana.It was a knitting spool(编织线轴)shaped like a mushroom.Mom said Dana could knit a scarf for her doll.Tim sighed that Dana wasn't a knittingkind of person but a rat kind of person.Mom laughed after knowing what'd happened.Together they drove to the pet store,where Tim arched and arched and lected a clear plastic ball,one in which the rat could run around on the floor safe from cats and dogs.Tim thought of Nezumi's ear and decided Dana's new rat would need this ball.
Scene 3: At home----in a pet store
At home: Tim's mother showed him the gift,a knitting spool shaped like a mushroom In a pet store: Tim lected a clear plastic ball for Dana.
The next day, Dana brought cupcakes to class.When she handed a cupcake to Tim, she asked if Tim brought Nezumi to school as Nezumi liked to ride in backpacks. Tim was at a loss becau Nezumi was at home on his bed. Then Dana asked what gift he was giving her. Tim replied it was a surpri. In silence they sat for a while before he heard Dana say
her parents were giving her a new bike for her birthday instead of a live rat becau they thought rats would bite things.
Scene 4: In the classroom Dana told Tim that her parents were giving her a new bike instead of a live rat, then they fell into silence.
Step 1:Read for the main plots
Step 2.Predict possible plot development
Clue 1线索词:gifts
birthday's gits
from Dana to Tim Nezumi
from Dana's parents A bike
from Tim ?
Clue 2 线索句:Dana=====Nezumi
1.Dana told him everything was a quarter except Nezumi
2."Nezumi is extra special,so he's ten dollars.
He needs a safe new home."Dana sighed.
3.When Tim whispered it was sort of old,Dana said old toys were the best.
4.When she handed a cupcake to Tim,she asked if Tim brought Nezumi to school as Nezumi liked to ride in backpacks.
5.In silence they sat for a while before he heard Dana say her parents were giving her a new bike for her birthday instead of a live rat becau they thought rats would bite things.
What could you learn from the ntence above?
Clue3线索情节:Infer and brainstorm by raising questions
Paragraph 1:
At home that afternoon, Tim stared at the plastic rat ball.