书面表达之拙句八种
一、慎用(it or there)
(1)（拙句）There are veral rious mistakes that you have made in your composition.
（改写）You have made veral rious mistakes in your composition.
(2)（拙句）There is only one interpretation that is acceptable. （改写）Only one interpretation is acceptable.
(3)（拙句）It is obvious that he is telling a lie. （改写）He is obviously telling a lie.
(4)（拙句）It is sure that they will succeed. （改写）They will surely succeed.
二、拖沓句（stringy ntence）
在英语写作中，我们应避免以下的拖沓句。如：
（拙句）The competition for college enrollment is extremely keen this year and the candidates spend days and nights preparing for the entrance examination and they neglect their health and so the newspapers carry articles urging teachers and parents to take up this problem riously.
（改写）As the competition for college enrollment is extremely keen this year, the candidates spend days and nights preparing for the entrance examination, neglecting their health. In view of this, the newspapers carry articles urging teachers and parents to take up this problem riously.
三、删繁就简
1、不必要地重复同一个词
（1）（拙句）The problem of cheating at examination is a rious problem.
（改写）Cheating at examination is a rious problem.
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（2）（拙句）They had an interesting account of the customs of the inhabitants of the village.
（改写）They had an interesting account of the villagers’ customs.
2、运用可有可无的词
（1）（拙句）There is a bridge which spans the river. （改写）A bridge spans the river.
（2）（拙句）She was told of the fact that her son had won the first prize.
（改写）She was told that her son had won the first prize.
3、过分讲究词藻
（句子唯美简短1）（拙句）My venerable parent expired a week ago. （改写）My father died a week ago.
（2）（拙句）Illumination is required to be extinguished upon vacating the premis.
（改写）Turn off the light when you leave.
（3）（拙句）Expectoration is prohibited on the vehicle. （改写）Don’t spit on the bus.
（4）（拙句）It is of great importance that action be taken in regard of this matter at the earliest possible date.
（改写）It is very important that something be done about the matter as soon as possible.
4、一味使用从句
（1）（拙句）I decided that I should take the examination.
（改写）I decided to take the examination.（用不定式）
（小鸡吃虫子2）（拙句）The professor was absorbed in work who did not notice my prence.
（改写）Absorbed in work, the professor did not notice my prence.独一无二的近义词（用分词短语）
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（3）（拙句）If you start early, you will get there at noon.
（改写）Starting early will get you there at noon.（用动名词短语）
（4）（拙句）During the four years when she studied at college she ldom watched TV.
含盐率 （改写）During her four years at college she ldom watched TV.（用介词短语）
（5）（拙句）Beijing, which is the capital of China, is a famous ancient city.
（改写）Beijing, the capital of China, is a famous ancient city.（用同位语）
（6）（拙句）The splendid display in shop windows has a fascination which is irresistible.
太阳能板原理 （改写）The splendid display in shop windows has an irresistible fascination.（用单词）
四、语流跳脱
1、主语与语态
（1）（拙句）The young man drove the old truck at top speed and the motor was damaged. (man – motor，主动—被动)
（改写）The young man drove the old truck at top speed and damaged the motor.
（2）（拙句）The professor left the classroom after the lecture was finished. (professor—lecture，主动—被动)
（改写）The professor left the classroom after he finished the lecture.
2、人称与数
（1）（拙句）If one has talents, we will likely succeed. (one – we )
（改写）If one/ you/ we have talents, one/ you/ we will likely succeed.
（2）（拙句）When a person thinks only of himlf, they will have few friends. (a person – they)
（改写）When a person thinks only of himlf, he will have few friends.
（3）（拙句）One who helps others will find that they will get help from others. (one – they)
（改写）One who helps others will get helps from other will get helps form others.
3规定情境、时态
（拙句）He worked late into the night but gets up early the next morning. (worked – gets)
（改写）He worked late into the night but got up early the next morning.
4、语气
（拙句）First stop the noi and then you may start discussion. ( stop—may start)
（改写）First stop the noi and then start the discussion.
五、代词指代不明
1、it, they和you的不确定用法(indefinite u)
（拙句）In the article it points out that the air pollution of this city is rious.
（改写）The article points out that the air pollution of this city is rious. 或It is pointed out in the article that the air pollution of this city is rious.
（1）（拙句）The water supply in this area is scanty; they should do something to ea it.
