读后续写作文的点题结尾之——互动和肯定
序：很久以前，当然在读后续写还没有诞生之前，我看文章（尤其是记叙文文学作品）先看看开头，然后马上看看结尾，我用这种方法来判断它是不是有趣。因为在我看来，结尾不光告诉我它表达什么，免得我看了半天也不知道说什么，其次我觉得结尾特别反应作者的艺术品味。
转入正题：
读后续写文的评价标准按照重要性分为：主题、逻辑、情节、语言
这可能和学生想的不一样，学生可能把重点放在语言上，而忽略了主题的探索。我们批改试卷，首先看主题对不对，如果不对，无论你的语言多出色，都不会及格。既然说到主题，那就要先谈谈如何在结尾点题？
一个完整的故事包含六个部分：点题、定位、进展、评议、结果、回应。回应是指故事直接的结果或状态对现实（现在或将来）的影响，即一系列已经发生的事件即刻或将来所产生的最后的状态或长远的影响。是不是最后必须是哲理性结尾？非也！结尾的回应应该是：照应
开头的人、物、事件、情景、状态、名言警句（扬州 李福庆）。
换句话说：主题的呈现形式是丰富多彩的，如果原文的描写只是表达一件难忘的事情，并没有什么人生哲理，那我们的主题也就是启事的格式范文
让这件事有个圆满的结果，其结尾应该体现这点。结尾点题，这个题要根据原文作者的表达意图（purpo）来定。
点题方式有很五种，我今天先讲第一种：互动式：A说出想法和B的积极肯定的反馈
具体解释：
A说出想法：哲理、评价、愿望等，首先要和主题有关，照应所给原文中的主题线索。
B的反馈：对的想法十分肯定；内心的活动，震撼、激动、开心
最后可能有进一步点题，但不是必须的，取决于前面对话有没有表达出来。
表明上看这就是对话结尾，但这种对话结尾需要三个特征的部分：蕴含主题、表达人物性格、照应线索。所以必然需要前后有一些铺垫过渡。
注：下面三个例子是我从八舒筋草
省教师资源交流里下载的试题，感谢提供精品试卷的老师。
例1：(2021济南高三期末考试 )
My 11-year-old daughter, Elizabeth, started to talk about quitting swimming, which broke my heart becau she loves swimming. So when the swim ason began, I cut a deal with her. She would practice three times a week a蛀牙原因
nd try really hard. I wouldn’t make her compete in the swim meets. Elizabeth does not like swim meets. She gets horribly nervous but not becau she wants to win. She doesn’t care if she wins.
Recently, Elizabeth’s team announced a special swim night: Members 11 and older would swim a timed 50 meters relay. It wasn’t exactly a meet，becau it would involve only team members. That was my view. Elizabeth argued that it absolutely was a meet becau there would be races. I told Elizabeth I really wanted her to go. She fought back angrily but finally agreed.
When the day of the special swim night arrived, Elizabeth was nervous. She was the youngest person and shorter by at least a foot than most of the other kids. She panicked when it was time for the T-shirt relay. The relay works like this：One person from each relay team puts on a T-shirt, a pair of socks, and a swim cap；swims 50 meters; and gets out of the pool. She takes off the clothes and puts them on the next person, who then swims 50 meters. This continues until everyone on the team has completed a lap.
Then it was turn to swim. She emed to swim faster in the T-shirt and socks than she did when she wasn't wearing them. Approaching the halfway mark, Elizabeth was in the lead. Suddenly，somebody noticed that one of Elizabeth’s socks had fallen off and was floating (漂）in the pool. “She has to get that sock on before the end of the race，” a swimming official told Elizabeth’s team，“or you will be disqualified.”
Everybody on her team started screaming，“Elizabeth! Get the sock!” On the ride home, she shared her moment of winning again and again. |
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Everybody on her team started screaming, “Elizabeth! Get the sock!” However, she couldn’t hear them. It was time for desperate measures. A girl on my daughter’s team jumped in the pool, grabbed the sock, and swam after Elizabeth. “You have to put the sock on,” the girl screamed. The girl in lane two was about to pass Elizabeth. With the sock finally on, Elizabeth swam her heart out for the last 15 meters. It was clo. But Elizabeth beat the other girl to the wall for the victory.
On the ride home, she shared her moment of winning again and again. She talked about how scared she was when someone grabbed her foot and how funny it was when she came to the finish and how great the night was. She told me that if the T-shirt relay was an Olympic event—and she is quite sure it should be—her team would win the gold medal. I told her that in my professional opinion, she was absolutely right.
分析：文章开头说
My 11-year-old daughter, Elizabeth, started to talk about quitting swimming…She doesn’t care if she wins.
可以推断本文主题是人物的想法的转变，结尾点题句：
She told me that if the T-shirt relay was an Olympic event—and she is quite sure it should be—her team would win the gold medal. I told her that in my professional opinion, she was absolutely right.
女儿先告诉我对胜利的假设，这就是照应开头了，然后紧跟着我表达十分肯定，进一步强调了主题。
例2：惠州市2021届高三第三次调研考试
Thomas watched the irrigation canal (灌溉渠) for a sign of water. It looked as dry as he felt inside. Thomas’s thoughts were interrupted as his younger sister, Maggie, came skipping across the field.
“What are you giving Mama for her birthday?” she asked.
Thomas felt his stomach turn. He had forgotten that Mama’s birthday, the first since they l
eft their hometown, was tomorrow. “It’s a surpri, Maggie,” he answered. It was the truth. Even he would be surprid.
Thomas would wish to be back in the mountains of their hometown. Surely Mama would want the same. At least it rained there. Each time it did, Mama, Thomas, and Maggie would sit on the front porch and watch for a rainbow. Then each of them picked out a favorite color in the rainbow. Mama always gave the same answer. “Turquoi (蓝绿色，绿松石),” she would finally say with a dreamy smile, pointing at the sky. “Squeezed in tight, between the blue and green. Clo your eyes and you can e it. If you could touch it, it would feel cool, like a breeze blowing across the stream.”
