The illustrations below show how chocolate is produced.
Summari the informaiton by lecting and reporting the main features.
【高分范文及深度点评】
The diagram shows the stages in the process of making chocolate.【所有的小作文第一句话都要用一般现在时。流程图必备三个词：process：整个过程, stage：阶段，step：步骤】
Chocolate comes from the cacao tree, 贵吉祥which is grown in parts of South America, Africa and Indonesia.【开头不能冲上来就直接介绍cacao tree，而是通过主题词chocolate引出，否则显得太唐突】qzone【流程图特点之一：介 绍过程要使用一般现在时】【流 程图特点之二：大量使用定语从句，将有关联的两句话连接。】【流程图特点之三：大量使用被动语态】The tree produces large red pods which contain white cocoa beans. Firstly,【流程图特点之四：使用一些表示顺序的连接词】when the pods are ripe, they are harvested, the beans are removed and they are fermented for veral days in large wooden boxes.【三个句子的并列：“句子A，句子B and 句子C”。】During the fermenting process, the beans turn brown.【流程图特点之五：要 适当地添加个别图中没有交代但能从图片中直接读出来
的的一些内容，否则可能达不到字数要求。但是一定要把握尺度，千万不要加上自己的主观观点，否则会扣 分】
Next, the brown beans are spread in the sun to dry. They are then put in large sacks and transported by train or lorry. After this, the beans are taken to a chocolate factory where they are roasted历史痕迹 in an oven at temperatures of between 250 and 350 degree Celsius.
击沉战舰After being roasted, the beans are crushed and the outer shell is removed. This part is not needed for making chocolate. Finally, the inner part of the bean is presd and liquid chocolate is produced.
【流程图特点之六：一般不需要写总结】
最后再总结一下流程图的特点：
特点一：现 在时
特点二：定语从句
女的英语特点三：被动语态
特点四：顺序词
特点五：适当添加
特点六：无总结
雅思流程图范文《砖块的制作》(含9分范文 及考官点评）
深情的意思WRITING TASK 1
湘南大学
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry.
Summari the information by lecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
Brick manufacturing
* Clay: type of sticky earth that is ud for making bricks, pots, etc.
【满分范文】
The process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry can be outlined in ven concutive steps. First the raw material, clay, which was just below the surface of soil in certain clay-rich areas has to be dug up by a digger.
Then the lumps of clay are placed on a metal grid in order to break up the big chunks of clay into much smaller areas, which fall through the metal grid onto a roller, who motion further gregates the bits of clay. Sand and water are added to make a homogenous mi
xture, which is then either formed in moulds or cut into brick-shaped pieces by means of a wire cutter.
Tho fresh bricks are then kept in a drying oven for at least 24 and a maximum of 48 hours, veral dozens if not hundreds of bricks at a time. The dried bricks are then transferred to a so-called kiln, another type of high temperature oven. First they are kept at a moderate temperature of 200 牵牛招聘℃ -1300 ℃ . This process is followed by cooling down the finished bricks for 48 to 72 hours in a cooling chamber.
Once the bricks have cooled down and have become hard, they get packaged and delivered to their final destination, be it a building site or storage.
(215 words)
【考官评语】
Band 9
This respon fully satisfies the requirements of the task. All key features of each stage of the process are appropriately and accurately prented. An excellent overview is given at the beginning of the respon and this skilfully incorporates part of the rubric, changing the grammatical function, to give a brief summary of the whole process. The message is very easy to read, with amless cohesion that attracts no attention. Paragraphing, linking and referencing are all skilfully managed. The language ud is very fluent and sophisticated. A wide range of vocabulary and structures are ud with full flexibility and accuracy. Only rare minor ‘slips’ can be found and the do not detract from the high rating.
雅思写作剑桥范文解析 流程图
下面是剑桥6的test 3 考到的流程图，考官给的范文。范文中有两步考官直接就写成一步，本来是3-8天和16天两个时间段，缩成了3个星期，大家写的时候可以分别写，不用写这么 精练。
考官范文：
The first diagram shows that there are four main stages in the life of the silkworm. 第一个图显示了，在蚕的生命过程中主要有四步。First of all, eggs are produced by the moth and it takes ten days for each egg to become a silkworm larva that feeds on mulberry leaves. 首先，蛾子产出卵，每个卵用10天的时间变成蚕的幼虫， 他们以桑叶为食。This stage lasts for up to six weeks until the larva produces a cocoon of silk thread around itlf. 这个阶段持续最多到六个星期，直到幼虫周围生产出茧（silk thread）. After a period of about three weeks, the adult moths eventually emerge from the cocoons and the life cycle begins again. 经过三个星期的一段时间之后，成年的蛾子最终从茧里面出来，这个生命的循环就再一次开始了。
The cocoons are the raw material ud for the production of silk cloth. 茧是生产丝绸的原材料。Once lected, they are boiled in water and the thread can be parated in the unwinding stage. 一旦被挑选出来，他们在水里煮沸，丝可以在打开的阶段中被分离出来。Each thread is between 300 and 900 metres long, which means they can be twisted together, dyed and then ud to produce cloth in the weaving stage. 每条丝是300到900米长，这就意味着，他们能够被缠绕在一起，染色，然后在织布阶段被用于生产布品。
