雅思写作提高之雅思7分大作范文批改与解析
雅思写作提高之：雅思7分大作范文批改与解析
长颈鹿怎么画马上停车 雅思写作提高第一步：结构(5.0 - 5.5)
问题：出国留学的优点(the advantages of disadvantages of study abroad)
同学：One reason for tho who decide to go overas to get a higher degree is that they believe they can get better education in certain fields. That is to say, different universities in different countries have their specialized cours and rich resources can be provided according to their needs and requirements. Another reason is that they can learn a foreign language in a more efficient way. There is no denying that living in an all-round English environment and being affected by local culture make people quick learners.
解析：出国留学和高学历完全是两回事(出去读初中和高中都算出国);出国就是better education，在国内就不是better? 出国留学可不仅仅是上大学，而该同学认为出国留学就是去上大学的(因为她可能就是去上大学的，所以觉得所有人也都如此)，偏激。此外，第四句
论述变成了英语环境了(因为大家都去英语国家，所以主观认为，所有出国的人就是去学英语的)，再次带来了内容偏激。
大家找问题的时候是不是去找语法或者词汇使用上面的错误了?对，很多时候大家认为自己写的没什么问题(毕竟词汇和语法没少使用)，分数低会归类到“压分”。那么在感受一下5.5分的原因真是词汇或者语法问题吗?考官看不懂，就是看不懂;唯一看懂的就是结构还算完整，所以5.0 - 5.5分。
雅思写作提高第二步：逻辑(6.0 - 6.5)
逻辑部分的主要得分点有两个：一个是观点的准确性;一个是论证方法的灵活使用。我们根据刚才的5.0 - 5.5分的文章，进一步感受一下有了逻辑的内容有什么区别。
问题：出国留学的优点(the advantages of disadvantages of study abroad)
Tim老师改：One reason for tho who decide to go overas for study is that they believe they can have access to different educational resources. That is to say, different countries have different educational system, and they can provide people with their speci
alized cours and rich resources to their needs and requirements. Another reason is that they can learn a foreign language in a more efficient way. There is no denying that living in a foreign environment and being affected by local culture make people learn a language more quickly.
解析：Tim老师通过修改了上面同学的问题，把内容变得更准确、有说服力。所以，5.5 - 6.0分的一个最佳提分方式就是学会总结归纳自己要说的内容;否则，只是通过词汇或者语法是很难提高分数的(大家可以感受一下自己当下的学习方式就知道了)。
小班教研活动记录
使字草书 雅思写作第三步：语言(7+)
小站雅思君进一步给大家感受一下7.0分的标准又和上面的内容有什么区别。
问题：出国留学的优点 (the advantages of disadvantages of study abroad)
On one hand, people can have access to different educational resources when they pursue their study in another country. It is lf-evident that everyone would choo a place that offers a more competitive and better education in certain field as the destinatio
n for their overas studies. This explains the reason why bunches of young people flood into some countries for further their study, such as America or Germany. Under this circumstance, students will receive many materials that are more up-to-date and teachers can provide them with the latest development in their fields that differs from others.
解析：一段只围绕一个观点做展开论述。通过强调论证、解释论证、递进句等不同论证方法来解释观点：出国留学可以让人们获取不同的教育资源。并且语言使用准确且多样，层层递进。所以，从段落的逻辑性、紧密型以及语言使用的多样性还有准确性上面都符合7分标准。
2022年7月21日雅思写作真题回忆及范文
题目为Some business find that new employees who just finish their education lack basic interpersonal ability such as work with others as a part of team.
雅思小作文类型：流程图
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雅思大作文类型：社会类
题目：Some business find that new employees who just finish their education lack basic interpersonal ability such as work with others as a part of team.What do you think the caus of this problem?And how to solve this?
陈琳达 范文来自雅思哥：
Despite the high level of knowledge, employers today have found that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills needed in an office environment. This essay will analyze the main reason leading to the problem and offer some potential solutions to it.
