高考英语学习提升课堂:读后续写中“读”的技巧
读后续写是很多同学的心头之痛,主要原因是不知如何“读”,或重点读什么。笔者认为,如果没有充分的“读”,“写”就无从谈起。现以最近一次月考的读后续写为例,谈谈“读”的技巧。
一、原题呈现
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Arthur was messy. He didn’t try to make mess, neither did he try to clean up much. His socks never made it into the hamper (洗衣篮). And he only picked up his toys when Mom threatened to throw them away. Most days, Mom followed Arthur around the hou and cleaned up after him. She brushed the crumbs(碎屑) into her hand and threw them away after meals. She picked up his socks and made sure they got washed, dried and folded neatly before going back in the drawer.
One day, Mom asked Arthur to pick up his toy trains. He was reading a comic book and h
e was still reading, saying nothing. The trains had been on the living room floor since the morning.
星座礼品“You know what, Arthur? I’m not going to ask you again. I’m done cleaning today.”And with that,Mom put her feet up on the sofa and picked up a book to read.
什么是低烧At dinner time, Arthur noticed that there was a big pile of crumbs at his place at the table. After dinner, Arthur’s feet felt cold. He went to his room and opened his drawer, but the drawer was empty.“Mom, where are my socks?”Arthur called.初秋的雨
“There weren’t any socks in your hamper, so I didn’t wash them,”Mom said. Arthur felt unhappy. Now his feet would be cold, unless he wanted to wear dirty socks from the floor. He decided to stay barefoot.
When it was time for bed, Arthur said good night to Mom and turned to go upstairs. Arthur stepped right on his toy train in his bare feet.“Ouch!”cried Arthur.“That really hurt !”
注意:
1. 续写词数应为150左右
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
He turned to mom for help. However, Mom was still reading and said nothing._______________________________________
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Having put away the toy train, he caught sight of the dirty socks.________________________________________________
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故事梗概:
Arthur是一个messy男孩,经常不收拾自己吃剩下的东西,不收拾自己的玩具等物品,都
十大基金公司是母亲经常帮他整理,但Arthur就是不愿意按母亲的要求去整理内务;有一次母亲没有帮他再整理物品了,Arthur找不到袜子,赤脚上楼而不小心踩到自己任意放置的玩具火车上,弄痛了脚……
二、如何实施有效的“读”
世界上最长的名字1. 读情节
吃什么最有营养读透故事情节,重点抓住两条线:
一条是明线,即动作线:要理顺主要人物的动作过程,我们阅读时采取标注动词的方法,关注动词呈现的先后顺序,弄清故事中人物做了什么。
另一条是暗线,即情感线:阅读过程中,重点标注表示人物情感的形容词和副词。如果找不到描写人物情感的形容词或副词,可以通过他们的动作或对话,分析他们的情感变化。
(1)明线分析:标注动词,理顺情节。
首先标注描写Arthur和Mom的动词,推断人物性格特征。
第一,标注描写Arthur 的动词。
... he only picked up his toys when Mom threatened to throw them away.”... .. One day, Mom asked Arthur to pick up his toy trains. He was reading a comic book and he was still reading, saying nothing ...... Arthur’s feet felt cold. He went to his room and opened his drawer, but the drawer was empty.“Mom, where are my socks?”Arthur called ...... Arthur stepped right on his toy train in his bare feet.“Ouch!”cried Arthur.“That really hurt !”
Arthur不主动收拾自己的物品,除非妈妈说要扔掉才行动。当妈妈叫他收拾玩具火车,他无动于衷,继续看书;当脚凉了,在抽屉里没有找到袜子,于是对妈妈喊叫;上楼进房间,不小心踩到了玩具火车,脚很痛。从动词呈现的先后顺序就能明晰故事发展的情节,也能体会到Arthur有“不整理自己物品”的坏习惯。
第二,标注描写Mom的动词。
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Most days, Mom followed Arthur around the hou and cleaned up after him. She brush
ed the crumbs(碎屑)into her hand and threw them away after meals. She picked up his socks and made sure they got washed, dried and folded neatly before going back in the drawer.
And with that,Mom put her feet up on the sofa and picked up a book to read.
可以看出,很多时候妈妈都是帮Arthur收拾东西,但有一天,妈妈一反常态,翘起脚看书,不帮收拾了。可以推断,妈妈已意识到过度帮助孩子不是好事,要想办法教育孩子了。
(2)暗线分析,关注人物情感的变化。
陌陌聊天技巧我们要重点标注反映人物情感状态的形容词或者副词,以及语言描写。以Arthur为例。
Arthur was messy. He didn’t try to make mess ... ..
Arthur’s feet felt cold. He went to his room and opened his drawer, but the drawer was empty.“Mom, where are my socks?” ..“There weren’t any socks in your
hamper, so I didn’t wash them,”Mom said. Arthur felt unhappy ...... Arthur said good night to Mom and turned to go upstairs. Arthur stepped right on his toy train in his bare feet.“Ouch!”cried Arthur. “That really hurt !”
從划线的这些形容词和Arthur所说的话不难发现他情感的变化:一直messy,因为有妈妈帮着整理→妈妈叫他捡玩具火车,他“无动于衷”→脚变“冷”,无袜子,询问无果→“不开心”,因为妈妈没有帮他洗袜子→“生气委屈”,因为他踩到了玩具火车,脚痛。
从暗线分析,也能理顺文章的情节走向,理清文章脉络。为续写提供了情节支持与人物性格的“人设”支持,避免写偏。