建平中学高一第一学期作文指导整理
I: Descriptive （How to describe a person）
Generally speaking, the objective of describing a person is twofold:
phh>建国门内大街● to portray the person vividly----readers can imagine what he or she looks like;
● to show how the person is significant in your life. (through illustrative anecdotes)
Vivid portrait including:
concrete details on physical features;
typical behavior(specific gestures, actions showing feelings, interesting habits)
speech (memorable expressions, tone of voice, manner of speech, etc)
clarification of the person’s significance in your life.
以下一文是上海2011年高考的A篇，是很好的描写人物的范例，请同学们注意这篇文章的结构，好好学习并模仿下。
【P1】The teacher who did the most to encourage me was, as it happened, my aunt. She was Myrtle C. Manigault, the wife of my mother’s brother Bill. She taught in cond grade at all-black Summer School in Camden, New Jery.
【P2】During my childhood and youth, Aunt Myrtle encouraged me to develop every aspect of my potential, (dominant impression) without regard for what was considered practical or possible for black females. (supporting details 1) I liked to sing; she listened to my voice and pronounced it good. I couldn’t dance; she taught me the basic dancing steps. She took me to the theatre, not just children’s theatre but adult comedies and dramas—and her faith that I could appreciate adult plays was not disappointed.
【P3】(supporting details 2) My aunt also took down books from her extensive library and shared 我的初三生活作文them with me. I had books at home, but they were all rious classics. Even as a child I had a strong liking for humor, and I’ll never forget the joy of discovering Don Marquis’s Archy & Mehitabel家庭英文 through her.
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【P4】(supporting details 3) Most important, perhaps, Aunt Myrtle provided my first opportunity to write for publication. A writer herlf for one of the black newspapers, she suggested my name to the editor as a “youth columnist”. My column, begun when I was fourteen, was suppod to cover teenage social activities—and it did—but it also gave me the freedom to write on many other subjects as well as the habit of gathering material, the discipline of meeting deadlines, and, after graduation from college six years later, a solid collection of published material that carried my name and was my passport to a ries of writing jobs.
【P5】(conclusion) Today Aunt Myrtle is still an enthusiastic supporter of her “favourite niece”. Like a diamond, she has reflected a bright, multifaceted (多面的) image of possibilities to every pupil who has crosd her path.
【文章结构分析】
【P1】Identify the person in question: who; relationship with author; profession, etc.
【P2】Dominant impression (controlling idea in this ca): Aunt Myrtle encouraged me to develop every aspect of my potential (This is why the person is significance to the author)； (Supporting details 1) about arts
【P3】(Supporting details 2) about reading; pay attention to the connective “also”
【P4】(Supporting details 3) about writing; “more important”
【P5】(Conclusion) Reinforce the controlling idea.
【写作训练】
indraw请你描写一个人，主题不限，字数150—200
II: Descriptive (How to describe a place)
In a description of a place, we u a spatial order to create a clear image of a place or scene by appealing to as many of the five ns as we can. The description can be arranged in space from top to bottom, right to left, left to right, inside to outside, or outside to inside. We may do it from either a fixed or a moving vantage point.
描写性的文字通常有主观性描写和客观性描写，无论何种，都必须有一个arc是什么意思dominant impression, 然后用supporting details来支撑它。描述性的文字也最好有introduction, the body part和conclusion 三个部分
● The introduction：capture the readers’ attention through expressing the main features of the subject.
● The body of supporting paragraphs： bring the picture to life through the specific details and expressions.
● The conclusion：reinforce the overall impression by summarizing the details.
主题句和细节拓展句的选择取决于作者介绍景点的目的，如果是客观描写，目的是为了向
none的用法读者介绍该地方，那细节会围绕地点，面积，人口，风俗，当地的特色等展开。
如果是主观描写，目的是为了吸引读者去这个地方，那相关的细节应该以美丽景色的描写，附带简单的介绍该景点。
好的描写应该充分运用作者的视觉，听觉，触觉及嗅觉等感官。试比较以下两句：
A: In the window was a fan.
B: The blades of rusty window fan clattered and whirled as they blew out a stream of warm soggy air.
A句语言贫乏，没有感官的描写。相比之下，B句的描写包含了视觉（rusty window fan, whirled），听觉（clattered）以及触觉（warm, soggy air），B句的细节描写生动形象，更能让读者感知那电扇，并且让读者感受到作者当时的感受。
