volunteered

优秀高中英语作文：OnVolunteer

ThedefinitionofthewordvolunteerinLougnan(Longman)Dictionary

issomeonewhohelpsotherssponstaneously(spontaneously)and

”strue!Lifeisastyleofenjoyingyourlf,not

onlybyentertaingandenridingyourlf,butalsobytheprocess

ofhelpingothers.

Undoubtfully,thovolunteersrevealtheirgreatloveand

theeternalthemeoftheworld,

Withouthove(love),it”slikebirdswithoutwings,failingtoshow

itstalentsofflying,It”slikespringwithoutflowers,burying

oluntyworkunites

China,shouingtheworldhowunitedChinepeopleareshockingthe

worldofitscooperation.

Peoplearoundthecountryaremakingtheireffortstohelping

others,whichleavestheworldanimpressionthatChinaisaveal

country,andallthepeopleherearelikebrothersandsisters,who

neverimaginehowtouchedIwaswhen

IwatchedtheTVprogramcalled“MovingChina”.13peasantsfrom

tangshangvolunteeredtohelpthovictimsofSichuangonhearing

thetremendouarthquakehappenedthere,leavingalltheirfarm

workdoneinthefieldtheysacrifiledanythingandhelpedothers

atanycost,fortheyknewtheglantpainstheearthquakebrings

nneverforgethowmuchpainstheyhavendertaken

intheearthquakeandhowmuchhelptheyhavereceivedfromthe

world..Theycomparedtheirownfeelingstothevictimsandpasd

n,peoplewillpassthespiritfrom

generationtoqueneration,,

howsweetwilltheWorldbe!

Ihaveadreamthatoneday,Iwillbeamemberofthevolunteer

dreamthatoneday,I”llmakecontributionstoChina

dreamthatonedayI”llbe

afounderofaworldCharity,helpingpeopleallovertheworld.

I”mfirmlyconvincedthatitwillnotonlybeadreanforme,but

alsoadreanforpeoplealloverChina,allovertheworld,andfor

thegreatGlobalVillage.

专家建议：

整篇文章条理清楚，构造完整，总体感觉很好。但有个别语法错误，

固定搭配有些用得不够精确，建议多用课本学过的固定搭配或是词组造句。

专家点评：

文章语言流畅，运用了修辞手法，呈现出肯定的语言功底。此外，论

据生动有力，让人信服。假如句子之间的多用些关联词就更好了。