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议论文模板：

一．四段式------两边倒：讨论某观点或事物的利与弊

1.开头：背景+题干改写

2.利

3.弊

4.结论

模板1：

Withtherapiddevelopmentofcomputers,Internethasbecome

r,asacoin,everything

hastwosides,and------isofcournoexception.

SomepeopleholdtheopinionthatInternethasaconsiderable

nwith,------.Inaddition,------.

Nevertheless,otherstaketheoppositeviewpointthatInternethas

thing,------.Foranother,------.

Tosumup,inmyopinion,Internetisnothingbutadouble-edged

ldtakeadvantageofoneedgeandtrynottobehurt

bytheother.

范文

AdvantagesandDisadvantagesofInternet

Withtherapiddevelopmentofcomputers,Internethasbecome

r,asacoin,everything

hastwosides,and------isofcournoexception.

SomepeopleholdtheopinionthatInternethasaconsiderablenumber

nwith,Internet,asafantasticinformation

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expressway,providestremendousmostupdatedknowledgeand

tion,itbrings

muchconvenienceandtoagreatextent,

illustrate,wecanalmostdoeverythingonlinebyjuststayingathome.

WecanshopontheWebsite,orderbooks,rervehotelrooms,and

anbuyandllstocksonthenet,conduct

e-businessandnde-mailsaswell.

Nevertheless,otherstaketheoppositeviewpointthatInternethasmany

thing,thefrequentoutbreakof

computervirusbringmanytroublesandimmeasurablelosstous

ther,thereisalwaysunavoidable

pornographyontheNet,whichdoesgreatharm,especially,to

physicalandphychologicalwell-beingoftheyoungsters.

Tosumup,inmyopinion,Internetisnothingbutadouble-edgedsword.

Weshouldtakeadvantageofoneedgeandtrynottobehurtbythe

other.

模板2：

Astheoldsayinggoes:“Nogardenwithoutitsweeds.”…iswithout

etheritisablessingoracur,however,people

takedifferentattitudes.

Thereisnodenyingthat-------Morever-----Lastbutnotleast--------

Whilethereisagreatdealofenthusiasmnowadaysoverthe

advantagesof-------,

thing,-----Foranother,-------

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(一边倒结尾):Whenallthefactorsareexamined,wemaysafely

mustdoistomakesurethatthepositiveonesareencouragedandthe

negativeonesareeliminatedasfaraspossible.

(平衡结尾):Obviously,thereissomeelementoftruthinboth

stioniswhetherwecanfindthebalancebetween

mustdoistomakesurethatpositiveonesare

encouragedandthenegativeonesareeliminatedasfaraspossible.

范文

Astheoldsayinggoes:“Nogardenwithoutitsweeds.”TheInternetis

etheritisablessingoracur,however,

peopletakedifferentattitudes.

ThereisnodenyingthattheInternetcanvastlyimprovetheefficiency

ofscientificrearch;itallowsscientistsswiftaccesstoallthedata

er,

asinformationisasvaluableasanymaterialresource,anyonewho

hasaccesstotheInternethasacompetitiveadvantageinbusiness

overthowhodon’tnotleast,theInternethasmade

personalcommunicationbothmoreconvenientandmorerapid.

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Whilethereisagreatdealofenthusiasmnowadaysovertheadvantages

oftheInternet,thing,

theconstructionoflinkstothesystemrequiresahugeamountof

investment,whichcanbeastrainonthebudgetofadeveloping

ther,notalltheinformationavailableonthe

raphicitemscan

infiltratethemessagesdownloadedbypeopleunfamiliarwiththe

“web”.

(结尾选择一):Whenallthefactorsareexamined,wemaysafelycome

mustdois

makesurethatthepositiveonesareencouragedandthenegativeones

areeliminatedasfaraspossible.

(结尾选择二):Obviously,thereissomeelementoftruthinboth

stioniswhetherwecanfindthebalancebetween

mustdoismakesurethatpositiveonesareencouraged

andthenegativeonesareeliminatedasfaraspossible.

二．四段式：讨论原因和解决措施

开头+原因+措施+结尾

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引言段(导入背景/现象)：

Quiterecentlythephenomenonhasaroudwideconcernthat某种

现象。Itisofparamountimportancethatweascertainthecausand

identifytheeffectiveremediesofthisphenomenon.

二、主体段：

1.产生现象的原因：

Frommypointofview,therearemanycausforthisdisquieting

nwith,____.Inaddition,______.Thelastbut

nottheleast,_____

2提出解决问题的方法

Wehavenoalternativebuttotakevigorousmeasurestoaddressthis

thornyissue.

Ononehand,_____(resolutionone):

Ontheotherhand,____(resolutiontwo):

Furthermore,_____(resolutionthree)

三、结尾段

Tosummarize,------

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范文：

Quiterecentlythephenomenonhasaroudwideconcernthatthe

competitionintheemploymentmarkethasbecomeexceedinglyfierce.

WhenwereadnewspapersorwatchTV,ourattentionisalways

attractedbyincreasingunemploymentrateinyounggraduateswho

paramountimportancethatweascertainthe

causandidentifytheeffectiveremediesofthisphenomenon.

Frommypointofview,therearemanycausforthisdisquieting

nwith,mostcompanieswouldratheremploya

low-educationalspecializedworkerthanathis-year’sgraduatefrom

panies,theyaremorelikelyto

ntly

enough,thetrainingforyounggraduatesusuallycoststhemalarge

tion,thecurrenteducation

systembringsonalotofbookwormswhoareadeptintheoreticalbut

ore,itishardforthograduatesto

lastbutnottheleast,alongwiththeimprovingofworkingefficiency,

proficientemployeeswithrichandextensiveworkingexperienceget

ca,foryounggraduates,there

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arefewerchancestogetaccesstothejobstakenupbytheolderand

moreexperienced.

Wehavenoalternativebuttotakevigorousmeasurestoaddressthis

and,itisadvisableforcollegestoadjustcours

therhand,studentsin

college,asfuturecandidatesforemployment,shouldnotonlygeta

goodcommandofprofessionalknowledgebutalsotakepartinsome

rmore,

governmentmaystagelawsandregulationstoassistgraduatesin

findingjobs.

Tosummarize,badontheabovediscussionandanalysis,withour

jointefforts,thethornyissuewillbecompletelytackledinthe

not-too-distantfuture.

三．五段式------一边倒

1.开头：背景+题干改写+个人意见

2.2、3、4段：论据------引用、对比、举例

3.结论

模板1：

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Itgoeswithoutsayingthat----hasbecomeamatterofpublicconcern

teroffacts,manyfactorscontributeto----.

Inthefollowingparagraphs,Ishallprentmypointofview.

Themostimmediatereasonthathasgivenritothisphenomenonis

----.

Anequallysignificantingredientthatdervesourattentionis……

Onemoreelementthatshouldnotbeneglectedinthisregardis…..

Inviewofthefactorsthathavebeenlistedabove,itisobviousthat

somemeasuresshouldbetakensoastoreinthesituation.------Inthe

finalanalysis,------cansurelybemaintainedaslongaswerealizethe

significantroleitplaysinourlivesandattachimportancetoit.

范文

Itgoeswithoutsayingthatweakeningofrelationshipamongfamily

amatteroffact,ollowing

paragraphs,Ishallprentmypointofview.

Themostimmediatereasonthathasgivenritothisphenomenonis

ofthemisthattheonce-extendedfamilytendstobecomesmallerand

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ildrenhavetoleavetheirparentsatanearlyageto

pass,childrenbecome

emotionallyestrangedfromtheirparents.

Anequallysignificantingredientthatdervesourattentionisthe

areurgedto

concentratetheireffortsuponwork,sothattheycanachievesuccess,

ult,theycan’taffordto

ortanceof

bondsofkinshipisgraduallyfadingfromtheirminds.

Onemoreelementthatshouldnotbeneglectedinthisregardisthe

reetime

ismostlyoccupiedbywatchingTV,surfingtheInternetorplaying

metolointerestincommunicatingwiththe

othermembersoftheirfamilies.

Inviewofthefactorsthathavebeenlistedabove,itisobviousthatsome

bersof

familieswholiveawayfromoneanother,regularcontactonthe

reunionson

holidaysorotherimportantoccasionscanmakeadifferenceaswell.

Fortholivingtogether,itisagoodideatotakesometimeoffwork

inal

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analysis,aclofamilyrelationshipcansurelybemaintainedaslongas

werealizethesignificantroleitplaysinourlivesandattachimportance

toit.

模板2：

Theissueofwhetherornot----------hasbeenwidelydebatedcurrently.

Somepeopleholdthebeliefthat--------,whileotherstakeanopposite

stand,asrtingthat---------.Isidewiththeformer/latteropinionfor

reasonsaddresdbelow.------.

Mostimportantofall,-----.

Next,----

Lastbutnotleast,----

Whenallthefactorsareexamined,wemaysafelycometothe

conclusionthat-----.

范文

Theissueofwhetherornottheparentsshouldbeartheresponsibility

andbepunishediftheirchildbehavebadlyhasbeenwidelydebated

opleholdthebeliefthatparentsoughttoanswerfor

theirkids’faults,whileotherstakeanoppositestand,asrtingthat

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iththeformeropinionfor

reasonsaddresdbelow.

Mostimportantofall,Parentsarethefirstteachersoftheirownchild,

whoshoulderagreatpartoftheresponsibilityforthegrowthofthe

saretoblamepartiallyfortheso-calledproblem

children.

Next,Intermsoflaw,parentsarethelegitimateguardiansofayoung

eduty-boundtogiveproperguidanceto

ntsarepunishedforthebadbehavioroftheir

child,,ithelpsto

urgeparentstostrengthenthesupervisionoverandeducationof

theirownchild.

Lastbutnotleast,astheoldsayinggoes:“betterunbornthan

unbred,”parentshouldtakegoodcareoftheirchild,instructingand

guidinghim/echildbehavesbadly,itmeansthefailureof

one’uently,theyshouldbeheldresponsiblefor

thebadbehaviorofthechildinquestion.

Whenallthefactorsareexamined,wemaysafelycometothe

conclusionthatbynomeansshouldparentsberelievedoftheirown

children’r,weshouldalsobearin

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mindthatthehealthydevelopmentofachilddependsonthejoint

effortsofmanypartiessuchasteachersandthesocietyasawhole.

模板3：

Theissueofwhetherornot---------hasbeenwidelydebatedcurrently.

Somepeopleholdthebeliefthat--------.AsfarasIamconcerned,I

amintotalagreement(disagreement)withthispointofviewforthe

followingreasons.

Firstandforemost,----

Secondly,-----.

Lastbutnotleast,-----.

Whenallthefactorsareexamined,wemaysafelycometothe

conclusionthat-----.

范文

Theissueofwhetherornotonecanacquirethequalificationsand

qualityesntialtosuccessthroughhighereducationhasbeenwidely

opleholdhebeliefthatstudyinuniversities

andcollegesisthekeyelementforone’sIam

concerned,Iamintotalagreementwiththispointofviewforthe

followingreasons.

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Firstandforemost,acollegeoruniversityisaspecializedinstitution

ofhigherlearningwherepeoplecanreceivesystematicandscientific

traininginacertainfiled,whichpavedthewayfortheirfuture

eadventoftheeraofknowledge-badeconomy,a

manwithoutasoundacademicbackgroundcanhardlyaccomplish

universitiesandotherinstitutionsofhigher

learningcanhe/shemastertheprofessionalknowledgeandrelevant

skillsntialtohis/hercareer.

Secondly,itiswitolearnatanotherman’enefit

muchfromtheinvaluableexperienceandknowledgehandeddown

fromourancestorsanddrawalessonfromthefailureofour

predecessorssoastoavoiddetour.

Lastbutnotleast,wheninuniversity,onealsohastolearnto

communicateandcooperatewithteachersandfellowstudents,

duringwhichonecultivatesfriendshipandacquirestheinterpersonal

skills,bothofwhichareconducivetoone’sfuturecareerandsuccess.

Universityissaidtobeaminiaturesociety.

Whenallthefactorsareexamined,wemaysafelycometothe

conclusionthatuniversityeducationcanlayasolidfoundationfor

y,weshouldwellcombinetheacademic

studywithsocialpracticetoachievelf-betterment.

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