dancewithmyfather

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EveryonelovedCinderella(灰姑娘),butIlovedheruglystepsister.

Thesidewaldmyneckfor

alookattheholidaywindowdisplay,butattheageofsixIwastoosmalltoearoundthegrown-upswiththeir

lastwereachedthestore,Istoodwithmyeyeswidened.“Look,Mother,”I

shouted,pressingmyhandsagainsttheglass,“Cinderella.”BeforemyeyeswasthemostbeautifuldollIhadever

en!fIliftedherskirtIwouldehercrystal（水

晶）ytiara（冠状头饰）fastenedtohersilkygoldenhairshone.

“Ifonlysheweremine,”Idreamed.“We’dhaveteaparties,sharecretsanddancewithahandsomeprince.”

Buttomydisappointment,mymotherguidedmeawayfromthewindow,explainingthatsheandmyfathercould

notaffordsuchanexpensivedoll.“ButtherewillbeaveryspecialgiftunderthetreeforyouonChristmas

morning,Madge,”shesaid.“Ipromi.”

LaterthatweekIleanedagainstMother’swingmachine,watchingtheneedleflashupanddown.“Betyou

don’tknowwhatitis!”Shejoked,holdinguptheclothformetoe.

“MyChristmasdoll!”tillintheearlystagesbutIcouldmakeoutthehead,neckandbody.“So

muchtomysurpri!”MotherlaughedasIdancedaroundtheroom,alreadypretendingCinderellaandIwereat

dn’tbelongnow.

continuedtoworkonthedoll,andwheneverIwalkedinto

ChristmasmorningIjumpedoutofbed,randownthehallandquicklyarrivedatthelivingroomwherethe

Christmastreewasplaced.

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情绪描写--Cinderella

Excited/Amazed/Eager/Happy

dmyneckforalookattheholidaywindowdisplay.

lastwereachedthestore,Istoodwithmyeyewidened.

3.“Look,Mother,”Ishouted,pressingmyhandsagainsttheglass.

d,holdingthedolltightlyanddancingwithher,“Iloveit!”

laughedasIdancedaroundtheroom,alreadypretendingCinderellaandIwereattheball.

tementgrewwitheachpassingday.

dlyItoreopenthebox.

gmybreath,Iopeneditwithmytremblingfingers,asifitwasmyprecioustreasure.

penthebox,myheartbeatingfasterthanagallopinghor.

elmedwithjoy,Icouldn'thelpyelling.

rimmingwithwildjoy,Iunpackedthegiftboxcarefully.

brightenedup/litup.

tthumpedwithexcitement.我的心砰砰直跳。

strembledwithexcitement.

canIconcealmyexcitement.

hardlycontrol/containmyexcitement.

eldthebox,Ifeltontopoftheworld.

Disappointed/Depresd

ydisappointment,mymotherguidedmeawayfromthewindow,explainingthatsheandmyfather

couldnotaffordsuchanexpensivedoll.

drootedtothespotthemomentIopenedit,withmypassionwaning.

asIcaughtthesightofthedoll,amoodofdisappointmentdescendedonme.

tsanktothebottomtheinstantIsawit.

tdroppeddowntomytoenailswhenIsawit.

myheartaparttowatchthesadlookonherface.

yspiritssinkevenlower.

thedollontothefloorinafitoffrustration.

Grateful/Moved

myarmaroundhertoembraceher,whisperingthatitwouldbemyfavoriteandIlovedher.

therewithalumpinmythroat,tryingtofightbackmytears.（因感动、悲伤）而哽咽

fgratitudefilledmyeyes.

hewarmthsurgingthroughme.

sudden,awarmfeelingroupinmyheart.

rtwarmedastheloveofherfamilywashedoverher.

Cry

brimmedwithtears.我双眼噙满泪水。

er,tearsstreamingdownmycheeks.

elledupinmyeyes.

gtheuglydoll,Iwasonthevergeoftears.快哭了

其他动作及心理描写

ewalkwasfilledwithshoppersasmymotherandIhurriedtothedepartmentstore.(eager)

hatweekIleanedagainstMother’swingmachine,watchingtheneedleflashupanddown.

dsofquestionsran/flashedthroughmymind.

uldeMotherwatchingme,withaneagerlookonherface.

crosdmymindlikeafilm,whenmomsatinfrontthewingmachine,takingallthetroubletomake

thisspecialdoll.

yoflastnightcametomind/sprangtomind.

tohidemydisappointment,Irushedacrosstheroom,yelling,“Iloveher!Iloveher!”

uriedmyfaceinthedoll’sskirt.

mymothersighedwithrelief,followedbyapleadsmile.

外貌描写

fIliftedherskirtIwouldehercrystal(水

晶)ytiara（冠状头饰）fastenedtohersilkygoldenhairshone.

asimpleface,ckwoolenhairwaspulledbackinatighttie,withnoshiny

nothinglikeCinderella;shelookedmoreliketheuglysister.

一、激动、兴奋的心情

oexcitedthatIcouldhearmyhearthammeringinmychest.

imeIrememberthatChristmas,Ialwaysfeelthewarmthsurgingthroughme.

dtothebox,heldmybreathandopeneditcarefully.

aredancingbothinmyeyesandmymother’s.

littlejumpintheair,andrandirectlytowardsthegiftbox,yelling,“MyChristmasdoll!”

stwinkledwithpleasureandasked…

jumpintheair,twirled,ranafewsteps,stoppedandthenkneeleddowntoopenthebox.

ic,Irushedtotheshiningbox,pickeditupandtwirledindelight.

二、失望、悲伤的心情

asCinderella’suglysisterthatcaughtmyeyes,whichcaudagrowingnofdisappointmentinside

mybody.

feelthesorrowcameinwaves.

treameddownherface.

r,Ifeltanofdisappointmentsweepingthroughme,andtearswelledupinmyeyes

unconsciously.

rippleofsadnesswellingupinsidemybody.

r,atthefirstsightofthedoll,Istiffened,smilefadingfrommylips.

sappointmentheldmeentirelyinitspower.

hebloodinmybodycooleddownrapidly.

hockedandstampedmyfeetinanger,thinkingIwasfooledbymymother.

tsankthemomentIsawthedoll.

otedonthespotandmymindwentblank.

三、人物表情、动作描写

nuteslater,Iopenedtheboxcautiouslywithtremblinghands,picturingaradiantgirlinashining

dresswouldappearbeforemyeyes.

aughtsightofthedoll,myfacefellandtookonadisappointedlook.

erewasadeadlysilenceandInoticedshetriedtoholdbackthetearsthatalmostbrimmedoverher

eyes.

n’twaittoopenthebox,withmyhandstrembling,imagingtobegreetedbymybelovedCinderella.

gatthebitsofclothandrunningmyhandsoverthedoll’sroughhair,Imurmured,“Well,…”

redinasweatvoice.

rfacebrightenedandhereyeswereshiningwithhappiness.

yandexcitement,Iuntiedtheribbononthegiftbox,butwasgreetedwiththreatening

disappointment—itwasnothinglikeaCinderella,….

ingthis,shelaughedinrelief,runningherfingersovermyhead.

四、事件描写

ndedmeofthenightwatchingtheneedlesflashingupanddown.

edonmethatthebestgiftintheworldistheuglystepsister,whichisuniquebutfilledwithlove.

enlyoccurredtomethatmomhadworkedonitforlong.

ednothinglikeCinderella,butmoretheuglystepsister.

everaneasyjobtomakeadoll,evenifitwasjustanuglystepsister.

ndedmyofthedayswhenmymotherworkedonmydollandthesweatthatstreameddownherface.

t,nowandalways.